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So, before I get started know that I ask you be 18 or older to read my newest character profile. That being said, I'm looking for critiques as well as thoughts on his current state of done-ness. I will take most critiques into consideration, and may do a few bigger changes, but if I'm being totes honest, I may only make small changes if I feel they fit the general idea for the character. Like, I'm prolly not totally going to revamp him, but I am looking to make him a tad more interesting. So, fire away.

EDIT his name is Axel Van Deriz, just by the way.

Does he have a personality...?

Yes, I may have forgotten to add it in, though. I'll do that soonly.

EDIT: there, how is that?