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I would love a review of Bluebell, primarily with focus on her description, if that’s possible c:

Certainly! I'll just be working with what I've got from this point on but if anyone's happy to sit on the waiting list lmk!

don’t feel pressured at all to do mine, but if you have the time and energy, i would love a review of damian’s character because hes the character i’m the most comfortable writing but also simultaneously the character i’m the biggest perfectionist about + the most anxious over??? maybe ur review will help me come up with more ways ur demon can absolutely DRAG damian across that courtroom

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DRAG HIM

You know I think the world of your unicorn martyr, he's altruisic and wonderfully writ without any doubt in his character; I've seen him look for swords to fall on out of pure compassion, empathy and love and I strongly revere those human characteristics. I adore the compelling lionheart semantics at play, the flirtation between hero archetypes and martyr tropes.

I recognise this CSS from Contigency - needless to way, this custom template is beautiful - the execution is engaging without being the living, breathing embodiment of horror vacui, the content highlights the work wonderfully and visually there's a lot to feast on. There's no shortage of content here - a strong indicator that you've thought this character out and created a strong brand for him, you have a tremendousoy strong grasp and intrinsic understanding of who he is - it's a wonderful trait to have and rare as hen's teeth in the creative community.

Where I might tweak things for Adam:
I feel there's a huge amount of the walking dead content on there -- granted that comes with the play-by but I think the gifs, walking dead Rick Grimes videos are creating strong canon Rick Grimes semantics; pair that with the spoiler warning, it blurs the lines between original creation and existing canon character, which potentially might prove confusing for your audience. Call me a crotchety old marketing stickler (I am 😭), but I think if you stripped down the walking dead content you'd create a much stronger visual story and image for him without reminding your readers about Rick Grimes too much.

Thank you for posting, I hope this helps!

You know how Goldilocks had that ‘just right 😩👌’ kick between too little and too much? That's me with your girl's profile: it's not overdressed or stripped bare -- and don't get me wrong, I'm a complete sucker for profile opulence and Scanadavian here's-a-name-and-a-picture rat-a-tat machine-gun minimalism; a quick glance at my characters will tell you as much!

There's no right or wrong amount of content for a profile, for me, it's all about the vibe and energy you're putting out that entices people (hence my hodgepodge attempts at profiles and storytelling).

I think you've mastered the stat:storytelling ratio -- the quick written post did wonders to conjure up the characterisation for this character, you can envision the encounter you might have with her - and that spices it up from a cookie cut clinical list of statistics into a feast for the imagination.

I eat with my eyes as I keep saying so I'll always be banging on like a judge with a gavel about visual cues and design -- I think more visuals will help give her a flare and a stronger personal brand, but for what you've done so far great job: you've shown the essence of the character and vital information a roleplayer will need to know and keep their curiosity on the cusp.

Ah! You're still open, I hope. I just wanted to poke my head in and toss in this piece of crap darling of mine for a character review. No need for a profile layout analysis as my skills are not the best with that.

Walls of text. So many walls of text. I need to fix that one day.

Unexpectedly I'm first person besides the author of the topic to write review, damn that was hard one.



So what we got there? Sheltered Gorgon lady in world that she's completely new too, sound like recipe for disaster!
And in that aspect I can relate as I lived in countryside, I remember when I first was in city everything was so big and vast while now it doesn't impress me anymore. Well except I don't have petriyfing gaze which would be useful in many embrassing social situations.

But that aside so let's review her!

Calliope is balanced character, she can fight well with her powers while not being op, her history gives us some insight on her life although that could be worked on, specifically by writing more about her past as invidual on the gorgon island

As for her descriptions

Appearance wise there's nothing to add as it's good the way it's and allows others to imagine how she looks like.

Personality-wise she's balanced well enough, her naiveness and her formal speech makes sense story-wise.

Her moral ambiguity and honor code makes her interesting, while her take on the friends is healthy one since most of times betreyal is from the person we least expect which is kinda ironic.

While I think she suffers similar issue like Ragna which was reviewed earlier in that thread, particularly she needs some tweaking with text in that regard I can't help however you can ask someone for help with formating text.

Overall she's good character, keep going Wand!

I'd love to get a general view of what you think about Karu, as a character! (No need for layout review, as it's still a work in progress.)

If you'd like to dip into the future of 2026, you can also peek at the profile I made for her here https://www.rprepository.com/c/combusken
Some basic info is copy and pasted (like detailing her martial arts training.h The "older version" found in the link supplied is still lacking a lot of information. (Like her time as a Black Ops specialist, and the bomb that's placed her on inactive status until her psychiatrist signs off on a psych eval. They're currently working through PTSD and a few other challenges to get her right in the head again ;P ). Not necessary to peek at the "old version"! But you can if you want to

Same beloved character-o-mime facing different challenges.

100% open for critique on any of my kids.

Okay which character do you want to be critiqued(keep in mind that only one at time will be reviewed although you can add more, then next characters would be critiqued with second priority) Also what do you want to be critiqued?

I would love a general overview of my new character Ashton. Not done with her but would love some criticism

Just on a wee hiatus brb!

I'd love a general overview for Quinne

I would put August, I don't mind the whole 'second priority queue' thing.